Poetry and personal blog – Spilling my guts to strangers

Lost in Translation

a language a lashing expression so foreign
tongue in my ear a breathing so foreign

sibilance guttural clicks of the throat
rewired synapse connections so foreign

barrier broken flood out of control
thrusting the brain embedded so far in

deep ever closer more now always there
morning day night tomorrow so foreign

adriene exhaled on your sigh satisfied
incorporeal so outré so foreign

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NaPoWriMo Day 14. The NaPoWriMo prompt was to write a ghazal.

Please visit this list of my poet friends who are also doing the poem-a-day challenge. They are worth the look. I’m inspired by them daily. Contact me if you want to be added to the list.

© Sweepy Jean and Sweepy Jean Explores the (Webby) World, 2012

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Comments on: "Lost in Translation" (20)

  1. Wow… Great rhythm!

    “adriene exhaled on your sigh satisfied
    incorporeal so outré so foreign”

    Loved it! 🙂

    Here’s mine: http://ascendingthehills.blogspot.com/2012/04/napowrimo-every-moment.html

  2. Love it again! “thrusting the brain embedded so far in / deep ever closer more now always there”

  3. Thanks for a “new” poetry form. I’ll try it once the atoz is done.

  4. I’ve never even heard of this form of poetry before, Adrienne. You have done a marvelous job with this – what great imagery!

  5. Show off 😉

  6. Adriene, this one has great rhythm! And it’s catchy! I smiled at the title since that coupled with the “guttural sounds” reminded me of a time I visited Germany. Trust me, I gave new meaning to the phrase, “lost in translation”! 🙂

  7. Hello.
    Love the rhythm and flow of this. Well done!

    Day 13/14 Make My Heart Drunk…

  8. I learned a new form! I had not heard of this one. It was divine. Go Sweepy. You are really doing well with these prompts!

  9. I am so amazed at how you are doing this.. you have an amazing talent.. but we already knew that..go girl go!!!!! As always…XOXOXOXO

  10. Janaki Nagaraj said:

    Lovely.

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