This poem
Flies in a circle
Like a helicopter missing a rotor
Who’d have thought it would end this way
Just saying
Me bailing out you trapped in a tailspin
Thrashing the sky butting against ozone
Spiraling down to the
Last word
© Sweepy Jean and Sweepy Jean Explores the (Webby) World, 2012
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“like a helicopter missing a rotor”…I loved that line…I loved the whole poem!
Much appreciated.
Deep poetry by the birthday girl, love it. Happy birthday once again..
http://sulekharawat.com/2012/04/27/xenophobia-by-shloka/
Thank you, Sulekha!
Wow! Such exhilarating imagery! Beautiful!
Thank you.
I’m…going…downnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnn……
Lol!
I really like this one; very dramatic!
Thanks, Rolando! My inner life is quite dramatic.
The flight might be going down, but I’m not bailing on this mission. The writing is too darn good. I loved this! Happy Birthday poetic lady!
As long as you’re able to walk away from the wreckage
Much thanks, Tameka.
Great imagery and like the structure!
Thanks, Pamela. I’ve been playing around with this form lately and I like it. It’s tight but still with plenty of room to breath.
I like it!
Highly visual. A winner
Hi, Pennie! Thanks so much for reading.
Me bailing out you trapped in a tailspin
Thrashing the sky butting against ozone
Spiraling down to the
Last word….
I loved these lines. My husband was a chopper pilot and I could just imagine the helicopter without a rotor. Love the way your thoughts go in such versatile directions.
Thanks! I’m glad it sounds authentic.
you made me hold my breath! ‘Thrashing the sky butting against ozone’…very strong words! is this your angst?
-ELLE
It’s all my angst! xox Thanks, Elle
you’re a test pilot of poemin’ … and make it all seem easy…like this snapshot of so much going on…
It’s fun trying different forms. Thanks, Doug